Week
5 – Reportage
The
road to Orvieto is called Sagrantino Road after the wonderful red wine produced
only here in Umbria. Vineyards and olive
groves compete for sunshine. Sage points
hide bulbs of green that grow on trees pruned like apple trees to stay low to
the ground. Farms stack rectangles of
hay in pyramids to dry. Buildings with
vulnerable roofs held down by strategically placed rocks house animals and
equipment. The villas, attached to the hillside, overlook the rows of grapes
growing up the beautiful rolling hills. As
we travel higher, the view changes to water ways, a lake formed by a dam with
winding roads covered in arched tunnels.
The water, the color of my coffee is high and muddy, kept in check by
large cement retaining walls. Higher
still, fog mists the green mountain tops erasing details and occasional houses
close to the road surprise me awake. I’m
grateful to not miss the stunning vistas yet my head bobs longing for sleep
only to be bashed against the window each time the road, filled with potholes,
turns back on itself. In the melting
fog, the city of Orvieto hangs on the side of the mountaintop, a cliff growing
out and up with a massive system of tunnels underneath in which olive oil was
processed and water wells dug deep into the volcanic remains. Continually reinforced, the cliffs of Orvieto
protect its citizens from rivals on their way to or from Rome. In WWII the wounded had quick access to
hospitals through the underground passages.
The cathedral built at the height of the Gothic period is another story
entirely.
Joanci,
ReplyDeleteThis reportage draft is pretty kick ass—just so you know. Wonderful job documenting specifics with little “telling” language. You’re definitely on the right track. In all honesty, I think it would be doing the entry a disservice if you didn’t continue working with it (considering the fact that it is set up nicely for revision). To help you start generating ideas, consider a few creative calisthenics (Note: these won’t necessarily confine your writing—but the calisthenics will certainly apply a little pressure with regards to asking you to attempt a very particular style/type/method of creative writing, though only if you’re willing.): (1) expansion and/or contraction—or simply an overwrite, recycled from this material (*Imagine: you write a freakin’ great reportage that has great potential. RECYCLE, hm?). I find this exercise one of the most rewarding, because not only does it allow my writing open-range but, almost by default, allows my writing to find it’s subject, to find it’s own voice; (2) creative erasure—which I am also fond of, for two reasons: I’m able to cut any baggy words while inventing fresh language/imagery and pairing them in a new way (so I knock out two birds with one stone); and (3), juggling—this is a neat way to introduce multiple mini-subjects into a draft. However, juggling is fairly difficult to pull off (even for an experienced writer); so I would suggest juggling two or three of these mini-subjects first—that way the draft doesn’t become some kind of unadministered chat room (the ones where so many (teens) are in one conversation, and then someone who tries to join in medias res has no flipping clue what the hell is being discussed or if there is even a topic of discussion).
If you have any questions about the calisthenics (i.e., how to use them or if you need more explanation and examples) don’t hesitate to ask me. Also, Dr. Davidson and Dr. Fraser have an amazing creative writing book that discusses all of these and much more, in great detail. I highly suggest purchasing it (that is if you don’t already own a copy).
Again, awesome work, Joanci. Keep it up.
All the best,
Sydney